I cannot live without you -
Breathing is ever so sour, suddenly.
Sphere in the sky, how you glow like the raven’s eye.
Separation is deprivation of the soul.
The key to my intrinsic door –
How you look straight through me,
Even if you don’t know me anymore –
Change is inevitable - which I know you can see.
Glowing warmth, bright and safe –
You return to me - in my time of need,
You bring the colour back to my hair,
You re-plant me so - like a thriving seed.
Please don’t leave again – old friend.
I need you to stay and light my soul,
I want to bask beneath your golden rays,
And soak you up – entirely and whole.
SIDE NOTE: I hope you all enjoy my poem ‘Return of the Sun’. I have been inspired by the recent golden weather. I hate as the sun descends in the night, which brings the moon out, as I believe (perhaps like Dickinson would) this is when I ponder most about the world and myself as it's quiet as opposed to the day.
As well as existential ideologies, I have also attempted to capture the essence of Emily Dickinson's form. I have tried to incorporate Rhyme, short stanzas, the use of the dash as well as imagery which is inspired to me by Dickinson's poem "I taste a liquor never brewed".
Feature image: The sun and the cycle of life taken from google image https://www.google.com/search?biw=1440&bih=789&tbm=isch&sxsrf=ACYBGNSkG-SXMRr7O4Ltsc0BlvdKxKlDhw%3A1571206484661&sa=1&ei=VLWmXaqCKNq_9QPJi6zwDw&q=the+sun+black+and+white+artwork+&oq=the+sun+black+and+white+artwork+&gs_l=img.3…7572.14581..14818…1.0..0.362.6224.0j14j9j5……0….1..gws-wiz-img…….35i39j0j0i8i30j0i24j0i30.M-n6ju5p3bA&ved=0ahUKEwiq_IujkKDlAhXaX30KHckFC_4Q4dUDCAc&uact=5#imgrc=r_08_T_sd5XaeM:
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Hey Nelly,
This was a great poem… I automatically saw the similarity to dickonson and it is so inspiring… if you made it a little longer that would have been amazing. There was no need to write the side note because your poem captured all aspects of what you were trying to portray.. keep up the great work! Keep inspiring people with your beauty thoughts on the world 😉
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First of all, WOW! I really enjoyed reading this poem and I think you did such an amazing job. I love the way you personify nature and refer to the sun as ‘you’, it really amplifies this connection that you have with nature and your love for Summer. Also, great job at embodying typically Dickinson poetic devices and similar structural choices, evident through the length of the poem, constant dashes and highly figurative language. Dickinson’s poems can be quite opaque so I think adding a bit more depth to your poem and making the reader work a little harder to figure out the meaning would make this even better. Overall, I think this is one of your best blogs, and my only advice would be to try and use the same level of creativity throughout your other blogs, and continue to experiment with different literary forms as it makes for a great read!
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This is a beautiful piece, Tennille. It is as though you have written in technicolour– I am completely absorbed in your poetry. On the contrary to your other reviews, I appreciated the contextual passage at the end of the piece. It is refreshing for writers to share a clear insight into the source of their own inspiration, or perhaps their perspective of their own humanity. It establishes repour with one’s readers, as it feels relational rather than abstract. I think it is important to remember that the blogs are a device to promote reflection, it does not always have to be a perfect imitation, you can make it entirely your own.
Your use of symbolism is powerful, particularly in the second stanza, as you describe the sun as the: “the key to my intrinsic door”, I love that. As though the sun is the only thing that moves you, that heals you, simply beautiful. I especially loved the third stanza, in which you describe the sun as the source of your replenishment, as well as your true comfort zone. Again, the imagery is so powerful, I felt as though I could feel the sun, as whilst read this poem in a dark room! I also feel as though the sun is my friend that lifts me out of the dreariness, but sometimes it just burns me in the end (sorry, had to).
You have made good use of the unconventional stylistic choices known to (i.e. short stanza’s, the odd use of the ‘dash’), but you have also incorporated the use of ballad quatrain (ABCB) for every stanza, except for the first, which emphasises your own personal flair.
You should be proud of this piece.
Love,
Elora x
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