Peer Review 1

Grace Mokdassi’s Blog: https://s00218159.home.blog/2020/08/21/an-extraordinary-ordinary-moment/

There is something about your piece that holds great resonance with me Grace. I was automatically drawn to the title. It’s a quirky yet extremely fitting one that encapsulates your whole blog. I think what I love most about your blog though is the way in which you have perfectly captured that feeling of being above it all, I can really feel the height in your work, both physically and metaphorically.

You have great imagery in there such as “God’s greatest creatures leap from the ocean”. I love how you have captured this moment but also would have liked to have read something about the flora as i’m sure there was lots of it! Perhaps describing in depth your surroundings in this paragraph could take us even more into bush with you!

I love when you wrote “that moment, standing on the brim of the land, the peak of our lives, means nothing to the world and everything to me”. Alike the title, I think your choice of contrasts from ‘nothing’ to ‘everything’ is effective in grasping how significant this moment truly was for you. I too adore hiking and sometimes don’t have the words to describe that sense of achievement and happiness that washes over me as I look out into the beauty of nature but you have done that here! It kind of made me delve even further and ponder those big cosmological questions. It’s awesome that you have been able to do that through your writing!