Blog by: Brandon Ng. https://newyorker.home.blog/2019/09/06/a-bird-came-down-the-walk/
Hi Brandon! I really enjoyed this poem. The simplicity of your poem is what struck me the most. I can picture the simple and slight movements of the bird itself and the innocence that lay within in. I think you have captured perfectly a minimalist style with the simple movements of the bird. Through the use of rhyme as well, the peaceful tone of the poem is evident. I believe to strengthen your blog you could perhaps make it a bit longer to give it some more depth. As well as this, Perhaps the use of a visual aid could really make this poem pop! Other than that, I think your choice of wording and peaceful concept made it such an easy and enjoyable piece to engage with. Keep up the good work!
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Well spaced and thorough peer reviews. Thank you Teneille!
Editing Needed (and some workshop follow-ups- see Purdue Owl for help: http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/section/1/
* the innocence that lay within in. = within it ????? [ ]
*I think you have captured perfectly a minimalist style= he has used the minimalist style to capture……. wrong way round
* make it a bit longer to give it some more depth. = not a very useful comment
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